It fits in my mind, I guess.
Now, down to business. I will have to address two things. Two little small things.
First - COMMENT. I really don't learn about my mistakes in my writing if you don't COMMENT. Tell your friends to come and read this weird blog, and tell them to COMMENT. Thank you.
Second - I realise my writing style might look weird. Well thats cause it is. You see, I write the chapter, then I check for spelling mistakes, and then I move on. This blog is where I literally just throw down my writing creativity and practice the art of making words show stories. Get it? This is just me practicing, while I write my REAL book. Comprende?
Now. I do believe you deserve a chapter after that harsh scolding.
Here:
Chapter Eight:
Old-Bony-People-Of-Little-Meat
“I can fade. My body
and anything I concentrate on will fade, become ethereal.” Vlaedr and Skai
walked down the corridor, Skai recounting his adventures. “And so, I heard the
sound before you did, and had already reacted.”
Sorrow crossed his
face and he stopped, turning to Vlaedr. “I have been mourning your death ever
since. Nothing I have ever heard of could survive something like that.
Nothing.”
A smile crossed his
face. “But you seem anything like something no one has heard of.”
Vlaedr blushed, not
used to this sort of affection. Skai continued walking. “I went down two floors
before I reached a non-volcanic corridor. Whoever wanted us dead, has resources
and a reason to keep us away from Rio De Janeiro. We have to find out who this
is.”
“Don’t these types of
bad guys always have resources? AND a reason to keep other good guys away?”
Vlaedr asked, dryly.
Skai laughed. “You
are new to this world, and yet you already start noticing patterns. That is
good. Like a newborn, starting to learn how to take its first steps in this new
world.”
Vlaedr frowned. “You
just called me a baby. A baby that is learning to walk. That is seriously
condescending.”
Skai lead the way
through two, large double-doors, and into a grand hall. Massive pillars rose to
the ceiling, with a plush, long carpet leading down the hall to three rather
“grand” thrones. On those thrones, sat three old and.... “grand”-looking mages.
“The Grand Mages of
this Santuary?” Vlaedr muttered out of the side of his mouth.
“Yes.” Skai shot
back, as they walked towards them.
“I would never have
guessed...” Vlaedr muttered again, dreading another long talk with
old-bony-people-of-little-meat. Grand
Mages. He reminded himself. They are
called Grand Mages, not old-bony-people-of-little-meat.
Two hours, four cups
of coffee, three and a half dinners, and one car later, they were on their way.
The Sanctuary had
provided them with a rental car, clothes, food (no people), and
communication-device-speaker-things. Skai called them “phones”. Whatever that
meant.
“So. Bad guy = Scimitar
Yslock?
Motive = Is building
magical creatures to rule Earth?
Supporting Detail
= Used to work with Varoque?!
Complication = Wants
ME???!!!”
Vlaedr thought about
his words for a few moments.
“Yes, sadly yes, and
Hell YEAH.” Skai confirmed. He turned into a brighter neighbourhood, weaving
in-between pedestrians in the street, dancing and celebrating something.
Brazilians always seemed to celebrate something.
“So why the HELL did
he try to kill me and you? Is he an extremely stupid bad guy?” Vlaedr asked,
grumpy. The dancers resembled cocktail snacks. The type he had seen in that
wonderful club.
“No, as it turns out,
he is actually pretty smart. He needs a powerful army of supernatural creatures
to kill and do his bidding, probably met with strong resistance. How better to
test your abilities than to see if you survived that explosion? If you had
died, then you wouldn’t have been very useful to him.”
“Yes, being dead does
that to you.” Vlaedr muttered angrily, refusing to make “being Mr. Know-It-All”
easy for Skai.
“You know, you never
did tell me your whole story. Who Varoque is and what you are....” Skai said,
finally breaking free of the crowd and turning down a street with little coffee-shops.
“If I told you my
whole story, I would have no secrets. I like keeping secrets. It makes me feel
mysterious and powerful. Plus, neither have you.” Vlaedr growled. He just
noticed that all the little coffee-shops seemed to consist of old-bony-people-of-little-meat.
And he was hungry. AGAIN.
Skai smiled and
turned to say something to Vlaedr. Then the car suddenly decided to do a
barrel-roll, followed by head-spin.
Vlaedr roared and
kicked the warped door into a coffee-shop, sending the old-bony-people-of-little-meat
scattering. “STOP BLOWING STUFF UP AROUND ME! IT ANNOYS ME!”
Another explosion,
right in front of Vlaedr’s feet. Vlaedr went crashing into a coffee-shop behind
him. He felt a shard of hot metal follow his trajectory, twisting to the side
as it passed. An edge caught him on the cheek, slicing from his chin, over the
edge of his mouth, and up his cheek.
Skai appeared in
front of Vlaedr, and helped him up. Vlaedr felt at his cheek, a sharp pain
immediately registering as he touched the wide, cauterized slit. Vlaedr roared
so loudly, the remaining windows in the shop blew out. Skai went flying, as
Vlaedr pushed him aside.
“THE GLOVES ARE OFF!
I HAVE HAD ENOUGH OF BEING PUSHED AROUND!” And so, off came the gloves. Or the
ring.
The creature raised
it large head, gazing up with hatred, in the form of glowing green eyes. He
found the petty meat-snack, way up high, standing on one of the roofs with a
long cylinder weapon. Vlaedr smelled fear.
He bounded forward on
all fours, running to the base of the building that held the prey. A flash of light
and another explosive object came flying his way. But this time, a lot slower.
Vlaedr jumped straight up, snapping shut his massive jaws on to the flaming
object. He landed on his hind-legs, and grabbed the object with his paw,
sending it flying back to its maker.
The prey moved too slowly.
Way too slow.
A chunk of the roof
was torn out of the building, sending it, and the prey, plummeting down. Vlaedr
was already moving. He was in the cloud of asphalt falling towards the ground,
grabbing his prey around the chest. He landed and shook his head, throwing the
pathetic hunter into a car.
A flashing-light-car
came speeding up to Vlaedr, smacking him backwards. But Vlaedr had enough. He
flipped in his backwards motion, landing in a crouch, moving before the car
even stopped moving. Digging in with his claws, Vlaedr hit the car with a great
force, making a massive dent. Vlaedr roared again, a fearful thing of anger and
hunger. Then he grabbed under the bonnet and strained with all his strength.
The car rose into the
air.
He roared again,
triumph shining in his eyes. Then, with a final heave, the car flew backwards,
through the third-floor window of one of the coffee-shops. “No!” Skai shouted,
coughing as he made his way out of one of the buildings. He was ignored.
Vlaedr slowly padded
back towards the motionless figure; the hunter. As he came closer, the human
opened its eyes and emitted a moan. Vlaedr was mesmerized the way the human
froze as he neared it, and the dread that seeped into his eyes. He opened his
jaws wide, letting the human see every single gleaming tooth he had.
“NO!!!” It was Skai
again. This time Vlaedr turned. “Vlaedr, where are you? This isn’t Vlaedr. I
know it isn’t! Where is your humanity?! You are letting your Beast control you!”
The Beast fought a
bit more, but Vlaedr always had more control. More strength. His eyes dimmed to
a glow. Then he slowly nodded his thanks to Skai. Skai sighed, and walked over
to the dying man. Vlaedr padded off to find his ring.
A strange burning swarmed
Vlaedr as he put on the ring. He frowned as he straightened his clothes and
pulled out the larger chunks of shrapnel. Something
isn’t right. He thought. He heard Skai talking to the man. I’ll worry about it later.
He walked slowly to
the pair, as his battered body began healing. He felt his cheek, the way the
hot metal had cut deep but immediately burned its path shut. It was painful,
and something that his healing wouldn’t heal. Ever.
A Battle Scar. He
liked that idea.
But even though
everything was in control, and the battle won, something still felt horribly wrong.
I love the name of this chapter.And how it sets in motion the horrible ending.....
And for the love of talking skeletons and flaming mockingjays, COMMENT!
YES, SIR! STAR SHALL COMMENT, SIR!
ReplyDeleteLove the old-bony-people-of-little-meat thing:)
I think you captured the violence and mercilessness in that very well.
Foreboding sense of foreboding at the end. If that makes sense.
I have a feeling this comment is another random one . . .
OH YES - before I forget, could you PLEASE attempt to take the word verification off???
Just read the penultimate sentence again and - HORRIBLE ENDING??? :S
ReplyDeleteThat does not sound good . . .
NO! IT'S ENDING! NO! :'(